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Post by Harrie » Sun Jun 19, 2005 10:49 am

Gem; Sapphires, Emeralds, Rubies, and Diamonds
Sapphires are like Water,
Smooth and flowing when tame,
Rough and harsh when not.
Emeralds are like Earth,
Dark and mysterious inside,
Light and carefree outside.
Rubies are like Fire,
Fierce and ravishing up close,
Warm and soothing at a distance.
Diamonds are like Air,
Calming and clear on a good day,
Thrashing and violent on a bad.
Gem; Symbols of Life and the Elements.
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Post by CaptSyf » Sun Jun 19, 2005 9:10 pm

I like the poem.
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Post by Hellkite » Sun Jun 19, 2005 9:11 pm

good poem Harrie

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Post by Harrie » Mon Jun 20, 2005 11:50 pm

Thanks I did it for my College Prep English class first semester this year. i found it while going through my folders
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Post by blindeye01 » Tue Jun 21, 2005 7:44 am

One suggestion, remove "on the" from the poem, as it is unnecessary and removing it will make the rythm of the poem better.

The poem itself is really great though.
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Post by Harrie » Tue Jun 21, 2005 9:12 am

thanks blindeye :D
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Post by blindeye01 » Tue Jun 21, 2005 9:33 am

No problem. You're a good writer.
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Post by JPKTrekker » Tue Jun 21, 2005 11:43 am

Once again, great work, Harrie. I really like your work. Nice metaphor poem.
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Post by Twitch » Thu Jun 30, 2005 1:35 pm

That's refreshingly good!

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Post by Numbazix » Thu Jun 30, 2005 2:58 pm

:D Very nice indeed. :)
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Post by icewolf132 » Thu Jun 30, 2005 3:33 pm

8O very nice Harrie!
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